I’m glad I was able to have someone peer review my paper. The changes my reviewer suggested were right on target and I need to figure out how I can revise my paper. It was strange at first to analyze someone else’s writing, but it was kind of fun too. The thesis of my paper is, “if you can change something about yourself change it, if not change the way you feel about it.” I wrote about my personal experience with health care. Basically, my paper is about how and why I got braces plus 790 words. My reviewer noticed that within my paper I contradict myself. This is something I need to work on with writing and in my personal life. It was fun writing this essay, I enjoyed embellishing my plain old English sentences with analogies and I tried to flow my essay like the “The Modern Hunter-Gatherer” article.
-Jenny Ramsey
I like your thesis :) thats on target lol. I also like how you noticed that you contradict yourself. Many people try to defend themselves when people tell them things like that and because its true about them they deny the fact rather than accept it and work on it
ReplyDeleteBrittany Peterson
Yeah, it is easy to lose yourself when writing especially when it is 750 words plus. But along the way when writing you can discover something new about yourself.
ReplyDelete-Sarah Ramsey